Thoughtful and Thorough

  JW Editing


Here are some examples of edits we have done:


From Mortality: Pass It On by Don Wolfram, MD (pending)

Original Copy

Instead they got schooled in stupidity.  The ship got stuck in pack ice; another icebreaker went to rescue them and it got stuck.  Meanwhile, news of the fiasco spread worldwide, and they became the brunt of conservative jokes.  All I can conclude is that those people naively believed faux-science propaganda when they should have been reading the history of polar exploration.  While they were at it, the ship's engines were belching out thousands of tons of toxic CO2 from the burning of diesel and fuel oil.


Edited Copy

Instead they got schooled in stupidity.  The ship got stuck in pack ice; another icebreaker went to rescue them and it got stuck.  While they were at it, the ship's engines were belching out thousands of tons of toxic CO2 from the burning of diesel and fuel oil. Meanwhile news of the fiasco spread worldwide, and they became the brunt of conservative jokes.  All I can conclude is that those people naively believed faux-science propaganda when they should have been reading the history of polar exploration.


From Finding Hope by Elizabeth Diaz

Original Copy

Olivia decided to check the mail and go sit by the creek in the backyard until they finished whatever offense they were arguing about this time.  She trudged to her favorite spot, a small bridge Papa had built for the neighborhood children to play on when they were younger.  They had spent hours at this spot.  They would pretend to be on a boat, sail the oceans, or walk a bridge to an imaginary land with princesses and dragons.


Edited Copy

Olivia decided to check the mail and sit by the creek in the backyard until they finished their argument.  She trudged to her favorite spot, a small bridge Papa had built for the neighborhood children to play on when they were younger. They had spent hours pretending to sail the oceans or cross the bridge to an imaginary land with princesses and dragons.



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